I’ve gotten some feedback, and I’ve used that to come up with something I don’t hate.
Synchronizers are not supposed to awaken.
The comatose psychics who provide starships access to the central network sleep their lives away in coffin-like tanks. Their minds are broken by the process that creates them. This gives Captain Kandace Li Renwright some comfort, helping her to overcome her revulsion at the thought of acquiring one.
When Wendell wakes her from her sleep for a chat, she is faced with a pale, emaciated man who can speak into her mind. He claims to know nothing of who he used to be, and wants her help. The answers he seeks cannot be found on the network, only in the meticulous physical records the Corporation keeps. His past is locked in the maximum security facility where he was made into what he is.
Captain Kandace and her crew are about to embark on a mission to recover Wendell’s lost memories. They will bring him ever closer to his ultimate goal: punishing those who stole his life away from him.
I welcome any thoughts or comments. Would you read the book? Is there wording that seems clunky? What would you change? I just want to float this out there for a little while, and come back to it this weekend to settle on a final version, hopefully one that greatly resembles this one here.
2 thoughts on “The Yggdrasil blurb”
(look, I don’t have one of the geometric icons!)
It still seems a little too long to me. This is going on the back cover, right? I think it should be shorter and more mysterious. You don’t want to give too much information before they even open the book.
I worry that too short will leave potential readers uninterested or confused. I have to tell them what a synchronizer is, and I have to indicate that the reluctant captain is lucky enough to get one that defies expectations.